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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many are of the opinion that
individuals
 should accept the reality of
climate
change
 rather than try to combat it. In my opinion, certain levels of acceptance are pragmatic but it is still important to take meaningful steps. Those who argue a passive approach point to the ineffectual impact of
individuals
. The vast majority of problems related to
climate
change
 cannot be countered by individual action because they primarily involve corporations and governments.
For example
, companies that produce packaged foods,
such
 as potato chips and instant noodles, create far more plastic waste and industrial pollution in one day than a single person will in their entire life. Governments can make a greater
different
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 by enacting regulations to ensure that the methods of production and materials employed are more environmentally friendly. It
thus
 follows that the average person is justified resigning themselves to the facts of
climate
change
 and living in an area
that is
 not especially affected.
However
, the combined impact of
individuals
 highlighting
climate
change
 will influence key policy decisions. The best examples of
this
 are in European countries
such
 as France and Denmark where green parties hold tremendous sway in government.
Individuals
 empower these political parties not only by voting but
also
 through protests and consumer decisions. Even governmental bodies that are not as eco-friendly must take the environment into account when passing laws.
Furthermore
, corporations are now cognizant of changes in consumer
behavior
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. Massive conglomerates
such
 as Starbucks frequently advertise their environmental policies.
This
 has only happened because
individuals
 have demanded these reforms.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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