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You need a recommendation letter from your former university teacher. Write a letter to your teacher: • Give him the reasons for asking for the recommendation letter. • Give him/her details about your personal and academic background that can be added to your letter. • Tell him/ her about your future plans

Dear Mr. Yousri, I hope that you and your family are fine. I am Tarek Emad, one
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 prior students, in the group
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structural design in 2011. I will be thankful if you can provide me with a reference letter,
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is required to apply for a master's degree at Heriot-Watt University. As you know, it is complicated to get a promotion regularly unless I
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 prove that I am able to improve my skills.
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, I have been overloading my knowledge with practical experience since I
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graduated.
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had a profound awareness of all techniques in the field, I decided to enhance my path with an academic degree.
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, I have to choose 10 subjects among 15
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, so I need your help to pick the ideal topics that will help me in the field. I will send the list of available curriculums. I wish to send the recommendation letter before 10 August because it is the deadline for all applications. your Faithfully, Tarek Emad

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Your letter is well-written and effectively communicates your request for a recommendation letter. However, ensure that your greeting and closing are more formal to maintain a professional tone throughout the letter. In terms of coherence and cohesion, consider breaking down your letter into smaller paragraphs to ensure each idea is clearly presented. Additionally, ensure a cohesive logical structure throughout the letter. Overall, well done but room for improvement in maintaining a formal tone and strengthening coherence and cohesion.
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