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Some people think that it is necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures. Others say that books, films and the Internet can be used as a source of information about different cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many people explore different cultures and traditions by travelling to those places and having
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 experience while some opponents believe that same thing can be achieved by just scrolling the net about different information. I reckon that the learning experience that one gets from practical demonstration is far better than theoretical.
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 for their extensive study and learning experience and it
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 them in long run. The things which can be seen and learn by seeing anything practically is far different from reading theoretically. Books and
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 can be misleading sometimes and one cannot fully rely on
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 given
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