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The internet provide us with information about life and culture of different countries and some people say it is not necessary to visit these countries to learn about them. To what extend do you agree and disagree with the statement? Give your opinion and relevant example.

#internet #information #life #culture #countries #people #visit
People use
internet
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the internet
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 mainly for
information
 retrieval. In
case
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the case
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 of learning about various countries and their
cultures
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,cultures
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 it has a vital role in providing
information
. So, many
thinks
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 there is no need to visit others countries if we get enough
information
through
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apply
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online. I totally disagree with
this
 argument since I believe learning starts from actual
experince
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experience
not
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,not
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 from
internet
 content.
First
,
Internet
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 is merely
a
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information
 source where you can
finds
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find
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 facts and
information
. But one cannot
experinece
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experience
 the culture or weather of
a
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apply
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various places just by
seeinng
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seeing
 some web
information
. In my personal
experinece
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experience
, I
didnot
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did not
didn't
 know how snow cold would be,
untill
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until
 I
experince
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experience
 it on my own. Having said that, one of the best methods to study the culture and language of other
country
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countries
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 is to go
that
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to that
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 place, mingle with local people and get the hands-on
experince
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experience
experiences
.
In addition
, being a true global citizen by visiting more places open the world of opportunities.
For example
, when you meet local folks in their country, there are a lot of chances to develop
relationship
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relationships
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 and career opportunities. Watching tourism content
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from
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form
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from
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 Youtube will not be sufficient to understand
variuos
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various
 cultures. In conclusion, though we may get to know a lot of
information
 from
internet
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the internet
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,
but
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apply
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we cannot obtain actual
experince
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experience
 unless we visit the place.
Hence
, we can use online
information
 just for pretravel
idea
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ideas
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not
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,not
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 for real
feeling
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feelings
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.
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