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Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that older people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

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There is considerable controversy over whether
grandparents
 should live together with their extended families or whether older
people
 should live independently. I will now discuss a few valid arguments from both sides before I come to my conclusion. On the one hand, there are various reasons many
people
 support the idea that
grandparents
 should live with their children. The
first
 thing is that family members should be able to expect a higher level of emotional support from their elders, especially when facing life's difficulties,
such
 as scandals.
Second
, if you are living under the same roof, you will spend less on necessities
such
 as food and utilities. You will
also
 enjoy your life more.
Although
 there are arguments against it, I strongly believe that elderly
people
 should be encouraged to become as self-reliant as possible. The
first
 advantage is that it will boost their self-esteem and protect them from a mental decline when they get older. It is scientifically proven that the possibility of getting mental diseases in old
people
 who live independently is the lowest.
In addition
, it is a sorrowful fact that many younger families these days do not have the housing space or even spare time, which is necessary to take care of their
grandparents
 properly.
Finally
, many older members may not have the chance to visit their grandchildren frequently, making their visits all the more meaningful. Overall, deciding whether
grandparents
 should live with the extended family or live independently depends on
people
's wishes, circumstances, and choices.
However
, many arguments lean in
favor
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 of
grandparents
 living more independently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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