Some people claim that the government should provide free health care. Others think that the government will not provide the most innovative methods of treatment and it's better to invest those funds in education and culture. What is your opinion?

These days medical bills are increasing day by day that why so many families struggle with payments of bills. so some people opine that
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the
Government
should give free medical
treatment
while
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others think that the
government
can't provide us high technology
treatment
so they should use those assets in education or culture. Perhaps
this
is true but it cannot be denied that
health
care is essential for society.
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society
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not everyone takes good care
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themselves because of their economical background. They can't afford that those medical bills.
As a result
, they avoid
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proper
treatment
and die.
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Millions of people live hang in the balance since they don't have enough money for their
treatment
. If the authority
provide
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them free
health
services everyone
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to the hospital and tackle
with
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their illness.
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Furthermore
, the
Government
Takes taxes from all of the
citizen
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and people deserve to get good facilities. It is their
responesbility
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responsibility
to provide them free of cost
health
facitility
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facility
.
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, in
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the
govenments
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governments
get billions of fund from taxes and every single person pay their taxes so the
government
should not
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his role for the public and make policy for free
health
services. In conclusion,
Although
Education and culture
also
a vital role for the nation it is helpful for the country to grow
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health
care is more important than
this
so that the
government
should think about
this
first
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fundamental human right
  • Accessibility
  • Equality
  • Health services
  • Medical bankruptcy
  • Innovative treatments
  • Stifle innovation
  • Allocate
  • Enlightened society
  • Well-rounded society
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