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Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will be no role of the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that advertisement serves no purpose as people purchase
products
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 according to their needs. But, I completely disagree with
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According to
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advertisements
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 provide information about the new and upcoming
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 in the
market
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. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain how
advertisements
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 at times help to form better choices about
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products
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.
Firstly
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,
advertisements
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 help to create awareness about new and upgraded
products
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 in the
market
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. It helps keep the consumer updated about the variety of
products
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 available in the
market
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 at affordable prices.
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,
advertisements
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 helped Kindle to promote its business to a wide range of customers.
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, through
advertisements
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, new companies get a chance to endorse their
products
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 to unknown
consumers
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 and increase their reach.
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,
advertisements
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 can be beneficial for both sellers and
consumers
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. Sellers can promote their goods and services through
advertisements
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, and
consumers
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 can
know
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the
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information
of
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goods and discount deals in the
market
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.
Moreover
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, it helps
consumers
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 to make more informed decisions.
Also
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,
consumers
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 grow aware of brands that cater for their needs better from the
advertisements
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. It
also
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 helps businesses to build brand recognition.
Although
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advertisements
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 help create awareness, they induce a sense of urgency and desire by targeting the consumer's psychology. In conclusion, companies certainly fool their
consumers
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 through fancy
advertisements
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. But I can't entirely agree with the belief that
advertisements
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 do not serve any purpose. Indeed, there are good and bad
advertisements
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. Still, it plays a very significant role in society by helping companies create more awareness
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consumers
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 about the availability of
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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