IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#convenience #foods #methods #preparation
The
last
 few decades have observed, a significant change in the
food
 habits of the citizens, all around the world. As
foods
 are readily available through phone calls or online orders from stores, some
people
 think
this
 will abolish traditional cooking practices at home. Despite some strong disagreement, I firmly believe
this
 will be the ultimate fate. Opponents of
this
 notion
argues
Change the verb form
argue
show examples
 that
People
 used to live longer and healthy, as they used to consume healthy, conventional and home-made
food
.
This
 is because of their cognitive bias towards the detrimental impacts of fast-
food
 industries, that offer
foods
 at their doorsteps, at a competitive price and many
people
 are ignorant of their nutritional value.
Therefore
,
people
 will stop buying them at some point when negative effects become imminent to them.
On the other hand
, there are plenty of healthy options available for
people
 to choose from different convenient
food
 stores. If someone decides to eat healthy
food
, they can easily order their meals from a variety of stores around.
For example
, there is a store named, Good
Food
 that offers prepared ingredients that can be prepared by the buyer within a short period of
time
.
Furthermore
, they calculate the calories for the consumers, so that they are aware of their healthy limit of eating.
In addition
, it saves lots of
time
 for the consumers, which they can spend in a productive way. As life gets busy for many parents
for instance
, who have to work outside to earn a decent living, ended up not spending much
time
 with their children. If ready-made
foods
 are available, they can spend
time
 with their children in their homework. In conclusion, even though we are being changed in terms of our meal preparation practices, which is a new concept to many, I think
people
 will gradually welcome
this
 idea of prepared
food
 delivered at their convenience. In conclusion, I believe that even though convenience
foods
 may cause
harms
Fix the agreement mistake
harm
show examples
 to health, they are cheaper and easier to get. Because of these positives, the change looks inevitable.
Submitted by drmehmoodahmed33 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: