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Some people believe that it would be better for large companies and factories to move to rural areas outside of large urban centres. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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In some places around the world, many individuals believe that large
companies
 moving to rural
areas
 will be more beneficial to society. In
this
 essay,the pros and cons of
this
 will be discussed as I believe it has its merits and demerits.
Firstly
, large
companies
 moving to rural
areas
 will have free land,
although
companies
 in urban
areas
 will be charged highly for the consumption of space which they take regardless of how little the land which they occupy is, in rural
areas
, there will be little to no free paid for space which is occupied.
Secondly
, noise can be a huge factor when building
companies
 in developed
areas
, due to the busy schedules of the vast population.
This
 plays a huge role when it comes to building confidential structures.
For example
, rural
areas
 will have less noise population, because of the little number of individuals leaving in the area.
Also
,imagine building large
companies
 which produce a lot of noise close to a learning institute,
this
 will cause a lot of
this
 distraction to the teachers and students of
this
 institute.
However
,the cons of moving large
companies
 to rural
areas
 might be impossible,
this
 is because of the little to no land space for building large associations. Rural spaces often
lacks
Change the verb form
lack
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 professional/well-trained individuals that skilled in working in large associations.
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