Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that schools is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While some people argue that parents should nurture their
children
to be proper members of
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, others believe that
children
should be educated at school by teachers to achieve
this
specific purpose. Since
children
are very affected by some special behaviours at
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age,
therefore
, home is a suitable environment to shape their initial personality.
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, parents are the
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biggest
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role models for their kids,
as a
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they can influence them by their good
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attitude
as much as possible,
for example
, they can try to respect
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while they drive when
children
are with them, as a consequence,
children
can learn to be respectful to law. It
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that at school
children
can practice their social skills because school is a place that fairly simulates civilization,
for example
,
children
can
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examine
the way they interact with other individuals.
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from that, since schools have known a
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competitive
environments which can educate
children
to stay motivated at various situations,
for example
, they constantly try to get the highest score in order to grab
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tutors
attention. In conclusion, parents can impact
children
's behaviours significantly,
therefore
, they can pass down useful personalities to their
children
,
nonetheless
, schools
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a productive place to
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examine
various skills in
children
and encourage them to gain practical abilities for
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. But that said, I agree with the
first
statement and I reckon home can be the most effective place to teach
children
good behaviours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral compass
  • Ethical paradigms
  • Cultural mores
  • Civic duties
  • Socialization
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Value systems
  • Cohesive society
  • Formative years
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