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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant..

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant..
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The two pie charts
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 the proportion of money spent on various household expenses in
Malaysia
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 and Japan in 2010.
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, we can see a large amount of money spent on housing in
Malaysia
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 and other goods and services in Japan. Meanwhile, the ratio of money spent on healthcare is quite low in both
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countries. On taking a closer look at both
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graphs, we can observe that the greatest expenditure in
Malaysia
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 was on housing which stands at (34%) followed very closely by other goods and services at (26%). These values stand at (21%) and (29%) for housing and other goods and services respectively. Now, we can see that the ratio of the total amount spent is much lower in both
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countries when compared to all the other sectors. In Japan,
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 value corresponds to (6%) and (3%) in
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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