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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

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Governments have spent a huge amount of money on enduring touristry since they believe it benefits
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the country. While others think that
tourism
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 has
serveral
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several
 drawbacks, I would argue that its merits
outweight
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outweigh
 the demerits. It is obvious that
tourism
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 brings few significant disadvantages to the nation's environment. Welcoming numerous tourists
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 means that a vast amount of trash is littered from entertaining activities
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 as eating or playing.
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, in Vietnam, tourists tend to
interested
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 in street food or cramped pavement restaurant where there is not enough space for bins to store the garbage and
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, people end up dropping trash on the ground.
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, authorities haven't
sloved
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solved
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 problem thoroughly to ensure
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the
cleaness
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cleanness
 of
surounding
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surrounding
 residences.
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,
tourism
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 has numerous tremendous advantages for the host country's economy as a whole and for each
individuals
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 as well.
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, the growth of economic activities is boosted since it impacts several industries directly and indirectly through
tourism
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 spend.
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, it can be considered as a
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 of investment in
infastructure
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infrastructure
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 as roads, rail networks or medical health.
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, touristry increases the employment rate by providing opportunities for
tourism
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-related jobs. In conclusion, despite some drawbacks of
tourism
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, it seems to be
outweighted
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outweighed
 by the advantages.
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Government
Goverment
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,
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, should promote
tourism
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 more as well as introduce few policies to improve the
environment
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 quality.
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