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People in the past would always repair damaged products. However, nowadays, people like to throw out and purchase new products. What are the reasons for this? What problems might this cause?

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In ancient times,
people
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 usually fixed damaged items. Today,
on the contrary
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,
people
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 prefer buying a brand-new product and donate or throw out their old one. There are certain motives
which
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that
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 explain
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 trend,
however
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, it may bring some unfortunate consequences which will be discussed in
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To begin
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 with, there are two main reasons why
people
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 are preferring acquiring a new product
than
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 repairing it. Due to technological advancements, payment methods have evolved enormously, and, today, there are easier options
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contributes
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 to impulse
people
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’s purchase habit,
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 as credit cards.
People
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 buy without even having the money to pay for it. In the past,
people
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 did not have
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 opportunity to buy what they would as they do today. Another reason is that
people
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 do not have
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time
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the time
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 neither patience to repair damaged products. It is a matter of priorities and
lack
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a lack
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 of
abilities
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ability
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 to fix things. As
people
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 are busy most of their
time
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 with professional tasks, they usually prefer replacing the item for another than losing their
time
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. Unfortunately,
this
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 change
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people
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’s behaviour brought out some possible consequences
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 as more trash and extinct professions.
People
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 are renewing their items more frequent and
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 might generate more
disposes
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,
therefore
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, the government needs to invest more money into recycling methods,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 a manner to properly throw electronics away.
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, another problem that it may cause is the absence or soon inexistence of some professionals.
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,
people
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 are not even wasting their
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to worry
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 about repairing.
Consequently
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, a person who is able to fix some item might soon need to find another occupation, because
people
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 are not too attached to their materials anymore. In conclusion, buying new products
instead
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 of repairing damaged ones is a highly debatable topic.
This
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 is happening because
people
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 have options as payment methods which
contributes
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contribute
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for
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to
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 their willingness to buy and recently,
people
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 lack
patience
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the patience
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 and ability for fixing their items.
As a result
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, more garbage is generated, and some professionals will soon be extinct.
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