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University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #focus #people #universities #range #subjects
For many
students
,
university
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 degree is the final step before facing
the
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work-life. Education in Universities
offer
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 specialisation in specific career paths which the
students
 want to pursue for their future. There is often a debate among people especially employers that the graduates with the required educational qualifications often lack other day-to-day
skills
. I completely agree with
this
 debate and believe that
eduacational
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educational
 institutions should introduce additional
skills
 required as per the current scenario in the
job
 market apart from the core
subjects
.
To begin
 with, Every year there is millions of fresh graduates searching for their desired
job
 in the business world. Most of them find it extremely difficult to secure their desired jobs in their specific field.
This
 is blamed on the
collegues
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colleagues
/
Instutions
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Institutions
 who fail to implant other crucial
skills
 in their
students
.
For example
, As per a survey conducted in India,
students
 from accounting
background
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backgrounds
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 lack knowledge about IT
skills
such
 as excel and other accounting
softwares
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software
software's
 which are used by almost all businesses. Even if the candidates are well educated with solving problems on paper they may not be able to secure a
job
 without training.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, Since there is
a
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great competition among applicants in a particular stream
students
 are likely to switch to another career path.
For
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may
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many
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 young professionals tend to switch from Engineering to business studies due to
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unavailability
availability
unavailibility
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the unavailibility
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 of
job
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jobs
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 and
surplus
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the surplus
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 of engineers in the market. Introducing some aspects of business studies in
engineering
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the engineering
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 syllabus can benefit the freshers to switch without
much
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difficulties
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difficulty
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. To conclude, adding
subjects
 to
a
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 already hectic syllabus will have some difficulties for the tutees but overall will bring more benefits for the future.
Hence
,
i
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 strongly agree that
unviersities
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universities
 should include a range of other
subjects
 along with the core
subjects
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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