Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

As a matter of fact, in
this
day and age, more museums and art galleries get a fee for
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,
in contrast
,the
others
are free,
people
don'
t
give money. My own view on
this
matter is there are some both advantages and disadvantages
Firstly
,to start with affirmative factors. In fact, nowadays both the adult and the
others
do not interest so places. More of them believe that they can find out what they desire to see on google. As an
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if a person dream to watch out
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of
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places, they start to enter various sites like google,Yandex and so on.
On the other hand
, more the younger don'
t
go there. I believe that there are some
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for
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they haven'
t
got enough money or chance, a person works and the
others
. In fact, some countries are poor,
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they have got
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history. It seems to me that, if there will become free, they attract more
people
. Personally,I think so places are indispensable and if it becomes free,
people
can get a high rate data about the history of the country. On top of
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a high number of tourists will learn information. On the one hand, managers of some museums and art galleries think that fees are crucial
for
example
they don'
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get
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grant
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from the budget of the country.They can realize different protective measures,developing programs and so on with their budget. As far as I understand there are some positive points for the country and
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. Weighing up both sides of the argument,fees mustn'
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be realized from becoming any categories
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,martyrs' family members,the adults,students and the
others
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