Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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As a matter of fact, in
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day and age, more museums and art galleries get a fee for entering,
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are free,
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don'
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give money. My own view on
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matter is there are some both advantages and disadvantages
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,to start with affirmative factors. In fact, nowadays both the adult and the
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do not interest so places. More of them believe that they can find out what they desire to see on google. As an
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if a person dreams to watch out
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of historical places, they start to enter various sites like google,Yandex and so on.
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, more the younger don'
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go there. I believe that there are some
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got enough money or chance, a person works and the
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. In fact, some countries are poor,
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they have got a rich history. It seems to me that, if there will become free, they attract more
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. Personally,I think so places are indispensable and if it becomes free,
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can get a high rate data about the history of the country. On top of
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a high number of tourists will learn information. On the one hand, managers of some museums and art galleries think that fees are crucial
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they don'
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get grants from the budget of the country.They can realize different protective measures,developing programs and so on with their budget. As far as I understand there are some positive points for the country and progress. Weighing up both sides of the argument,fees mustn'
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be realized from becoming any categories
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,martyrs' family members,the adults,students and the
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