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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit.

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As a matter of fact,in
this
 day and age, there are some actual issues. One of them is who observes to construct jobs, government or by those who
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 out the design of the building. It seems to me that there are both advantages and disadvantages on
this
 matter.
Firstly
,let us take a look at the advantages. More people accept that the role of the country is crucial in each job. One of them watches realizing the rule of the obligation. Many people claim that if the country doesn't realize control more actions will
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creat or
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 rise. As far as I understand,probably the government doesn't control and the companies will start to create what they desire. Maybe
this
 sounds excellent,
nevertheless
 afterwards some actions might establish as an example the company utilizes wrong materials,maybe to establish burnings. Recently,
this
 situation occurred in Azerbaijan.
On the other hand
,I believe that if they watch out, the design will be constructed better than the others.
Moreover
, being illustrated the pictures of ancient customs,garments and so on. On the one hand, some people believe that the design is to
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 by who will enforce the finance duty. My own view on
this
 matter,
this
 is an affirmative idea a draft must make up by who engage to do the finance duty. Maybe they make new innovations.figures and so on. Weighing up
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