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Many people believe that using a bicycle as your main form of transport has a lot of advantages whereas others think that it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days from transport forms its necessary to go anywhere as long
dictance
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distance
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distance
 to work or shop. The
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 is riding
bicycle
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 as main form transport Some individuals opinion think its best way to reduce on the obesity while
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this
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i
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 am going to explain both
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the pross
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pross
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pros
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 and cons of
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the bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 as well as my opinion in the forthcoming paragraph. There are multifarious benefits of riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 is satisfactory for our health , increase the heartbeat as we take it as daily a workout
such
 morning workout when you go to work and
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enviroment
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environment
-dirty free . Some
nation
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nations
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 buy bicycles
becouse
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because
its
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it's
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unexpensiveble
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inexpensively
 and easy and quick to bike as well its impact the traffic accidents
obisity
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obesity
 on cars in fact on
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Indonesia
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Jakarta
 about 70% of traffic
bocouse
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because
 the car accidents involve the buses and trains which is
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the impact
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 to our environment since 2013. On
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other
onther
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 hand , riding bicycles for long distances
such
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 a tiring thing to handle
i
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consdier
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consider
 to use a car or bus for those cases.
Further
,the weather conditions more like raining or flooding its
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complicated
 and
unsafeble
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unsafely
 situations that you must not ride
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 if you want to complete your life with your family ethier. In conclusion,
although
 riding
a bicycles
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a bicycle
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 as
main
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 form
transport
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 is not
right
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 decision to take but if you will use it for short distance or for morning workout
such
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i
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I
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 believe in those days that you must buy a car for
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different
 situation for making the life
more
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easier.
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