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Teenagers have problems at home and school. What difficulties are they facing now ? What should parents and schools do to help them ?

#teenagers #home #school #difficulties #parents #schools
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It is true that each individual has faced some kind of challenges during their childhood. Nowadays, young ones face a lot of difficulties
especaily
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especially
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school
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 and at home related to their mental and physical development.
This
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 with, time
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 by a student at
school
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 with their peers to gain quality education is not always beneficial. Nowadays,
bulling
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 of junior students by their seniors is common in almost every
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. Due to no proper
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readdressed
 of
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 incidents, the majority of young ones feel stressed and isolated which impact their academic growth in a negative way.
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,
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 of
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setting
 high expectations by parents from their wards in
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 stage of their life is
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another issue in the modern era. Failing to fulfil
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, a child gets demoralised and generally fails in achieving good academic grades.
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, the teachers and the parents can solve these problems efficiently if recognised on time.
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 of all, the schools must train their staffs to do regular counselling of all the students. Their concerns must be addressed promptly and should be discussed with their family to aware
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mental
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 well-being of their ward.
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, parents should not be
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. They must set practical goals for their children and should appreciate every little success by rewarding them.
This
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 small gesture can boost their confidence and encourage them to push their limits.
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, quality time should be spent daily with them to understand what
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 is going in their life. In conclusion,
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 teens face many challenges in their
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 and home
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bullying
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bulling
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 and stress, they should be solved efficiently. Guardians and tutors should work in tandem to make sure the overall development of a child.
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