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Some people think that public libraries are necessary, while others believe that nowadays public libraries are no longer important. What is your opinion?

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Libraries
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foremost
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 where you can find immense and trustworthy
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, sundry individuals believe that
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library
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libraries
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 are monotonous ,outdated and hard to access,
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 some believe that
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 will be elucidated in forthcoming paragraphs. At the outset,the conspicuous reason as to why
libraries
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 become less favourable to people
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internet
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 the fraction of time we can easily access the required
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 on the gadget, which we have with us all the time
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 the authenticity of these
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 is not trustworthy.
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 as data which is available on the internet does not provide
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or
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 person.
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determentle
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 disturbed health.
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,using
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internet
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 as a
source
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detrimental
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 effect on health too.
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 atmosphere of these Centre
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 peaceful,
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student
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students
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 can concentrate on their studies
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provide the oldest data of the research student
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 students require data with references and proof for submission of their thesis.
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libraries
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 analysis it is transparent that owing to
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meaning
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meanings
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 for various
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categories
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the learner
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learner
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learners
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, for younger one it is
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 lethargic process to operate these
biblogigacal
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biological
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information
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librararies
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libraries
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invited
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task achievement
Your thesis statement should clearly state your position and outline your key points. It is currently a bit vague.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied and precise vocabulary. Some word choices are repetitive or not entirely accurate, which affects the overall clarity of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on improving sentence structure and grammatical accuracy. There are noticeable errors that affect readability and comprehension.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly develop each main point with specific examples and explanations. Some points are mentioned but not fully elaborated or supported with evidence.
task achievement
You have a clear stance on the topic and provide multiple reasons to support your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You have attempted to discuss both sides of the argument, which is good for demonstrating critical thinking.
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