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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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Society’s opinion on a
tourism
 impact on nature and countries citizens might differ
on the contrary
 most
people
 will agree on it is a bad influence on every aspect of the
life
 of the inhabitants or the environment. I mostly agree with the benefits and bright sides of
tourism
, but
also
 will discuss the disadvantages of itself.
To begin
 with, I would refer to my
life
 experience. Without,
tourism
 it would be impossible for me to study and live abroad.
Tourism
 helped me and millions of other young
people
 to achieve their goals, break barriers, to start to think out of the box. Because of
this
opportunity
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 I have started to believe that I can do more and work harder.
Tourism
 helped me to realize how the world actually works and showed me various ways on how to follow my dreams.
Furthermore
,
tourism
 is
also
 a great chance to see the world, to see how
people
 from various places live, to learn their culture and traditions. It is always fascinating to learn something new and traveling it is getting more convenient. I think it can
also
 be beneficial for the country itself. There are a number of countries nowadays where their budget is merely all made up from the tourist’s investments. As for disadvantages, I think, the greatest problem here is the harm to the environment. The zoos or other places where animals are living frequently cannot
fulfill
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 the requirements for their
life
 level and necessities and numerous keepers are extremely violent to them
on the contrary
people
 will never see that. There is
also
 a huge problem in marine
life
 due to the fact of divers or snorkelers coral’s ecosystems frequently dye and it is devastating for a number of animals and plants. In conclusion, I’d like to say that for me there are certainly more cons than pros about
tourism
.
People
 are overall getting more benefits in light of the fact that of
tourism
. I think
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 it is vital to always remember as a tourist to be careful and never forget that the Earth is our home, and we should treat it like that no matter where we are.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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