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Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem. Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently, extensive attention has been put on
environment
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environmental
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 issues. There are negative
effects
 on plants and animal
species
 due to industrialization and urbanization. Some
people
 believe that those negative
effects
 cannot be tackled as
people
 have realized it too late.
However
, other
people
 argue that
this
 situation can be improved with effective approaches. I would support the latter view. On the one hand,
people
 believe that
this
 problem cannot be solved because the negative
effects
 that
people
 have made are not reversible.
For example
,
people
 are not able to make animal
species
 that have died out become alive again. Even if
people
 can preserve some endangered animals, those animals may not be able to survive in the harsh environment today.
Hence
, taking action now cannot solve the problem.
On the other hand
, I would argue that humans should take some actions to improve
this
 situation because it is humans' responsibility to protect plants and animal
species
 that are closely related to humans. If
people
 do not pay attention to those negative
effects
, they will
also
 be affected due to the imbalanced ecosystem.
For instance
, trees are critical in transforming carbon
to
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into
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 woods and produce oxygen for
people
. If
people
 lived on a planet without trees, they would face a problem with a lack of oxygen.
Therefore
,
people
 should take
their
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responsibility to protect plants and animals. In conclusion,
although
 some negative
effects
 are irreversible, I would argue that it is
people
's responsibility to imply some effective measures to improve
this
 situation because
people
 are closely related to other
species
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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