Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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the

students

have the

previliage

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privilege

of opting for a gap year before commencing their

life

at the university, which is predominantly used for gaining

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life

experience and travel.

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essay will shed light on whether

this

is any good or just a waste of time and effort.

To begin

with, as it has already been well

reasearched

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researched

and the findings have pointed out that education outside of our books can often teach us vital

life

experiences and develop inherent abilities to tackle the real everyday

life

, whereas just relying on books to get knowledge will not only limit our ability to see the real world outside of the school walls but

also

deprive us

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the reality which is often far away from the contexts of our books.

On the other hand

, there are people who stroll believe that taking a break from studies is nothing but a waste of time, which is no way productive or useful, but I strongly disagree with

this

notion, as taking time off and going abroad to witness a different culture and learn the lifestyle and language, will not only add colours to our monotonous student

life

, but

also

teach

students

how to deal with challenges and how to handle pressure situations as

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students

go to their travel alone or with their friends but not their parents or elders which is what most

students

are used to, being around our guardians and feeling cocooned and well protected from any extremities, but, when we are alone and directly in line to face the world on our own, we tend to learn how to get over them as well and that's the skill which will come in handy in every day of our future. In conclusion,

students

taking

gap

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year to gain experience, whether from travel or working somewhere to gain work experience was, is and will always be far more productive and the benefits of the gap year far outweigh any shortcomings that few people tend to outline.

Hence

this

practice should

definitly

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definitely

be encouraged and implemented by every school and college.

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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries tourism is an important part of the economy, but it also causes environmental damage. Some people believe that tourists should pay an additional tax to compensate for this damage. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.