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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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Mostly in developed
countries
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 the
students
 have the
previliage
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privilege
 of opting for a gap year before commencing their
life
 at the university, which is predominantly used for gaining
real
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life
 experience and travel.
This
 essay will shed light on whether
this
 is any good or just a waste of time and effort.
To begin
 with, as it has already been well
reasearched
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researched
 and the findings have pointed out that education outside of our books can often teach us vital
life
 experiences and develop inherent abilities to tackle the real everyday
life
, whereas just relying on books to get knowledge will not only limit our ability to see the real world outside of the school walls but
also
 deprive us
from
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 the reality which is often far away from the contexts of our books.
On the other hand
, there are people who stroll believe that taking a break from studies is nothing but a waste of time, which is no way productive or useful, but I strongly disagree with
this
 notion, as taking time off and going abroad to witness a different culture and learn the lifestyle and language, will not only add colours to our monotonous student
life
, but
also
 teach
students
 how to deal with challenges and how to handle pressure situations as
mostly
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students
 go to their travel alone or with their friends but not their parents or elders which is what most
students
 are used to, being around our guardians and feeling cocooned and well protected from any extremities, but, when we are alone and directly in line to face the world on our own, we tend to learn how to get over them as well and that's the skill which will come in handy in every day of our future. In conclusion,
students
 taking
gap
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 year to gain experience, whether from travel or working somewhere to gain work experience was, is and will always be far more productive and the benefits of the gap year far outweigh any shortcomings that few people tend to outline.
Hence
,
this
 practice should
definitly
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definitely
 be encouraged and implemented by every school and college.
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