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In a number of countries, some people thinks it’s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Dependence on the railway has increased a lot in recent times due to the increase in
population
.
As a result
, some parts of society opine that a large amount of money should be invested to build new railway tracks to connect between different cities, whereas others think that money can be used to upgrade existing public
transport
. Both perspectives have their own weight. So a critical evaluation is required before reaching a conclusion.
To begin
 with, railways are becoming essential in developed countries to help the growing
population
. The main reason is many people can afford travelling from railways than
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airplane
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 and its a fact that fast trains can save more time than other
transport
.
Moreover
, countries which are massive in size and large in
population
 require more fast trains to travel
longer
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a longer
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distance
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 for
working
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population
.
For example
, the Chinese government had invested billions of dollars to construct new trains routes to fulfil the growing
population
 demand. On other hand, the benefits of enhancing the current public
transport
 can save lots of money that can be used in
effective
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 way. Countries with less
population
doesn't
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 need new public
transport
 as they can focus
in
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 making
environment friendly
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transport
system
such
 as electric buses. Public
transport
 is a thing that people use daily and upgrading the facilities make sense rather than rebuilding new
transport
system
. To conclude, both sides of the argument concerning about making a better
transport
system
. Both statements have their own advantage but in my view upgrading
public
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system
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systems
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 can be a good option because it can be cost-effective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • investment
  • urban mobility
  • commuters
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • accessibility
  • rejuvenate
  • cost-effective
  • traffic congestion
  • economic sustainability
  • tourism
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