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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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It has been suggested that a topic for discussion, the
government
 must be signed strong items or verdicts for controlling the number of noise who realizes to worry to
people
. I am of the opinion that there are some both advantages and disadvantages on
this
 topic. Let us take a look at the advantages. Many
people
 claim that, in
this
 day and age, the annoying actions have risen
for
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,for
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 instance, more car drivers enforce hazardous a deed and to disturb the others. As well they think that if the
government
 enforces heavy items or verdicts, the situation will change to the good side. The applier
believe
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believes
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 that penalties , fines, sanctions are to increase by the
government
. My own view on
this
 matter is unruly acts have been establishing from different without activities
for example
 they haven'
t
 got the family, without jobs or duties and so on. It seems to me that being prevented those, afterwards probably doing fines or penalties.
This
 is a normal status that a person demands to enforce own rights. On the one hand, many
people
 illustrate some actions higher level than real. Sometimes, maybe
people
 rely on that
this
 action annoyed everybody,
nevertheless
this
 is the wrong opinion. I have read that, the rules of anybody shouldn'
t
 confine by the
government
 ,
Moreover
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this
 status pointed out international contracts,declarations and so on. As everybody may enjoy by a significant margin. I desire to cite " if anybody's law will realize, the others' rights aren'
t
 be terminated ". Weighing up both sides of the argument, the punishments needn'
t
 have to growth only
it
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apply
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needs to do on time.
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