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Some people feel that the exploration of space justifies a large amount of government and private investment. Other people think that this field is of increasingly low relevance, and should not be a priority. Debate both sides of this discussion, and explain your own view. How important is it for us to explore space at the moment?

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Space
 exploration can be an emotionally charged topic as well as scientifically interesting, and sometimes the lines between the two can blur. Both sides of the debate about whether to continue
space
 travel have valid arguments, which we will examine here.
First
, experiments on astronauts in
space
 help us learn more about medical conditions on Earth. A number of results from
this
 research can benefit people who suffer from cardiovascular problems, type 2 diabetes, osteoporosis, and balance problems.
Additionally
, satellites in
space
 monitor climate change, measure pollution
,
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 and prevent pollution.
Additionally
, the
space
 sector produces high-tech jobs.
On the other hand
,
space
 missions are quite expensive, and depending on how long and how far the mission is going, several
millions
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 or even billions have been spent.
Additionally
,
space
 exploration generates a great deal of waste. In fact, rocket tests and
space
 missions produce an abundance of waste. Overall, I would say that there is a stronger argument for the exploration of
space
, despite some drawbacks that need to be corrected. After all,
space
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 program contributes to safety for humanity and for nature's environment on Earth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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