Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

I agree with both points of view,
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I prefer to improve these
situations
. In the
worl
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world
always going to find places, people or
situations
that we do not like, that have bad vibes or that are very different from what we consider good. But it must
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into account that these are
things
that are always going to happen in life, like jobs, they are an experience that we need
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.
Although
in reality if it is very difficult, skip
situations
like these,
such
as working in something you don't like or have little money to buy
things
you like. But there is
a
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expression “at the bad time, good face "
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represent a lot
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this
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types of
situations
. As bad as you are going through, most of the time there will be something good, that you may not see at the moment,
such
as teachings, even the
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attitude
of people greatly influences to
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, or the decisions I make in the life.
However
, you can't always be happy and see the good side of
things
and
that is
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when things
like depression,
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suicide
or low self-
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esteem
happen. I
also
agree with people that no matter how bad the
situations
, they always see the positive side,
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positively
positive
can attract good
things
to your life in the future or present.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • acceptance
  • contentment
  • resilience
  • complacency
  • personal growth
  • societal progress
  • motivating
  • circumstances
  • growth mindset
  • innovation
  • persistent
  • frustration
  • dissatisfaction
  • realistic expectations
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