Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

I think that the
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think in a way
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a solution because if the
people
don’t search a solution to a bad
situation
after the
situation
it will be much worse. In my
opinion
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the
people
can solve the
situation
through some mechanism which
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the discussions for
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to
agreement
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and so better the
situation
and other mechanism
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to other
people
that they don’t know the
situation
for so all the
people
come together for better the
situation
. The essay
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about
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what
the
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people
thinks
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in a
situation
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, social or personal and they accepted or don’t accept the
situation
. My point of view I think that
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most
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are unconscious when
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the decision
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accept
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a bad
situation
as in the future
this
will be
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because the
situation
it
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will be more serious and the
people
will end up regretting where they can’t solve but the
people
are interesting and search a solution for
improve
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the
situation
with
mechanism
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that help
for
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get
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to
a
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agreement.
For example
, in Colombia is passing a bad
situation
where the
people
weren’t
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silent and they left to protest
for
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that the government heard them
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for
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get
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in an agreement as the government
want
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won't
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put
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a “
reforma
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tributaria” which affected to all the Colombians. In
conclusion
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this
is a problem that all the
people
discuss.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • acceptance
  • contentment
  • resilience
  • complacency
  • personal growth
  • societal progress
  • motivating
  • circumstances
  • growth mindset
  • innovation
  • persistent
  • frustration
  • dissatisfaction
  • realistic expectations
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