Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

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think in a way

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a solution because if the

people

don’t search a solution to a bad

situation

after the

situation

it will be much worse. In my

opinion

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the

people

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situation

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the discussions for

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agreement

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and so better the

situation

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to other

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situation

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discuss

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what

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people

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in a

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, social or personal and they accepted or don’t accept the

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most

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the decision

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a bad

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because the

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will be more serious and the

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the

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that help

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agreement.

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, in Colombia is passing a bad

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silent and they left to protest

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that the government heard them

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get

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in an agreement as the government

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put

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tributaria” which affected to all the Colombians. In

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this

is a problem that all the

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discuss.

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2Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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