The best way to resolve the international environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is true that one of the most effective methods to tackle environmental issues is to increase
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fuel prices. While I believe that it can bring tangible benefits to the environment, there are many approaches that
goverments
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governments
could adopt to solve those problems. There are some advantages that can not be disputed when governments introduce laws to increase the cost of fuel.
Firstly
, when the fuel is
exortbitantly
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exorbitantly
exorbitant
expensive, people would lessen
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of total amounts of using
private
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vehicle.
This
not only
lead
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to a reduction in carbon dioxide emissions but
also
save a kind of
enery
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energy
that are being exhausted.
Secondly
,
this
may
encourge
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encourage
people
try
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to use alternative sources of energy. Those renewable energy sources
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bountless
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boundless
and eco-friendly, so they
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not likely to cause some environmental issues
such
as climate change or polluted air.
However
,
Goverment
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Government
should make more attempts to solve those serious problems. They could allocate more resources on exploring new alternative energy resources and inventing new vehicles and devices operated by them.
Moreover
,
athorities
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authorities
should enact laws to reduce their prices, so that every
citizens
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in society could
be afford
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to buy them.
Finally
, there should have
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sustainable development in
economy
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in those countries.
This
includes some methods
such
as marine conservation, halting the spread of deserts,
anh
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and
the reclamation of agricultural land. In conclusion, environment-related problems are becoming serious, governments must take steps to tackle them as soon as possible.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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