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The purpose of a businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree.

#purpose #businesses #money
There is no doubt that one of the most important
thing
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 for businesses is to make money.
However
, it is becoming common to hear people talking about how they should concentrate only on
this
,
instead
 of the social responsibilities that companies have or the quality of the service they offer. I believe that
business
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 should have more presence in
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society than just make money. It is a well-known fact that any company must make money in order to keep running in
business
 and
also
 be able to compete with others.
In addition
, we can´t deny that
other
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 main reason for companies to focus on
this
, is because they have to cover the employee wages, the payments for the buildings or vehicles and their maintenance. It is important to understand that the key
for
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 a successful
business
 is having a good financial result every month. On the other side of
this
 argument, I believe that the owners of the companies have an important social obligation. From my point of view, one of the most significant is the way they treat their employees, they should always try to ensure their safety and never exploit them. Another thing to consider is the impact they have
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 the society around them. I think that
business
 should contribute with the local projects
such
 as
,
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 the environmental, the charity or the educational initiatives. As a conclusion, it is important to realize as I mention before that good profits are the key
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 a successful
business
,
however
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 I strongly believe that the owners must ensure that their employees aren´t exploited.
In addition
, they should try to put the same importance
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 their social obligation as they do
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 their financial goals.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial sustainability
  • Profit margin
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Stakeholder
  • Socio-economic impact
  • Ethical business practices
  • Customer retention
  • Brand loyalty
  • Workforce morale
  • Innovation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Competitive edge
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