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Developed countries have an obligation to help developing countries with aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

There has always been a gap between the haves and the have-nots, the rich
countries
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 and the poor
countries
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. Is it necessary for developed
nations
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 to lend a helping hand to developing
nations
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? A number of people claim that each country must take care of their own concerns.
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, I believe that
aid
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 from rich
nations
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 will be advantageous to poor
nations
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, for the following reasons.
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 with, global financial analysts are concerned that financial assistance from developed
countries
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 is detrimental to the economies of developing
countries
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 because economic
aid
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 from wealthy
nations
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 increases developing
nations
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' dependency on their donor
countries
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.
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, extra funding from rich
countries
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 supports the economic growth of poor
countries
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 as the funds are used to carry out key national development projects.
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,
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the Indonesia
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Indonesia
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 government uses financial support from wealthy
nations
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 to build toll roads in several regions and reconstruct tourism infrastructure in a myriad of
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Indonesia
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Indonesian
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 tourist spots. Another point to consider is
aid
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 from wealthy
nations
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, which in terms of the
health
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 sector, is deleterious to developing
nations
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.
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 is because
health
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 aids from developed
countries
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 sometimes contain a hidden agenda.
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, during the Covid-19 pandemic,
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-foreign-owned firms benefited from
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health-equipment
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health equipment
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 help offered by rich
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 to poor
countries
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.
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, support in the
health
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 sector from wealthy
countries
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 assists to alleviate
health
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 issues in developing
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. Developed
nations
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 have the resources not only to produce
high quality
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 medical equipment but
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 to develop medicines for new diseases.
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, to combat the epidemic,
Indonesia
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 has obtained a multitude of
health
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 assistance from developed
nations
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. Millions of extra vaccines have been donated by the United States, Australia, and the United Kingdom in order to accelerate
Indonesia
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's inoculation programme. What is more,
Indonesia
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 has
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 received medical supplies from European
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. In conclusion, despite the potential negative impacts of various types of
aid
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 provided by developed
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 to developing
nations
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, I believe that the benefits exceed the drawbacks, particularly when it comes to the financial and
health
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 sectors.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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