Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

An
organisation
is made up of people coming together from all walks of life for the achievement of a common goal.
This
depicts that we have people from different cultural
backgound
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background
backgrounds
and
hence
their
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would be
different
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a different
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mode
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modes
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of dressing. While some organisations
places
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emphasis on their
employees
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employee's
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mode
of dressing, others
tends
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to value the
quality
of
work
above their appearances. In my
Opinion
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opinion
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, the
quality
of
work
done supersedes a worker's appearance as an error-free
work
done results in greater Income generation for the company. Moreso, the authenticity of
task
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achieved leads to promotion and more
self actualization
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for the associate involved. The originality in the task performed by an associate of the company in terms of the job done been
error free
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and of good
quality
will result in more income generation without consideration given to the
mode
of dressing of the staff involved.
For instance
, when I was in
Sales
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the Sales
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department, I dress to
work
casually as I did not fancy everyday Suits and Tie,
this
makes me comfortable thereby boosting my performance for the day as in my opinion am not under a controlled
envirinment
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environment
.
this
in turn leads to the increase in the number of customers that purchased our product as I was able to effectively capture the heart of my target customers. Moreso, the nature of
work
done
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led to the Promotion for the deserving associates in the
organisation
without cognisance given to the way they dress to the company.
For instance
, I was promoted to a new position where am in charge of the regional Sales team due to my performance and
this
has led to me improving myself to be able to deliver and
continuoslly
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continuously
continually
add value to the
organisation
.
On the other hand
,
this
does not mean that we get to dress to the office in an unkempt and untidy manner as the
organisation
is been addressed on the way their staff present themselves.
This
is why most
organisation
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organisations
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have a dressing policy to regulate the
associates
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associate's
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mode
of dressing. In conclusion, my opinion is to give more importance to the
quality
of task being done by a worker rather than the way an employee dresses to the
organisation
.
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