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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

#people #innovations
Globalization and modernisation brought a drastic change in the
world
. Every day we met new inventions which make everyone,s
life
 easy and comfortable. Some people think more experiments bring more problems but I think we are having a wonderful
life
 while these
innovations
 are going on.
First
 of all,
innovations
 make any of the country proud and renewed,
for instance
,
for instance
, google is a vital part of everybody's
life
 now so
this
 made by Indian man which made
this
 country honoured.
Moreover
,
innovations
 make our activity interesting so ,meanwhile
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our
life
 will be boring if there is nothing new done by any country to get something or achieve something big. As we know covid 19 is the worst pandemic in the
world
, many people died because of
this
 deadly virus in different parts of the
world
 so after modernization and after hard work vaccination for
this
 viral got ready so
as a result
 all the nations getting
this
 vaccination and having a secure
life
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that more
innovations
 are just a wastage of money and time as the
world
 is facing a lot of more other problems these days
consequently
 it is less beneficial if the results are not that great as the money spend any of the experiment.
Furthermore
, sometimes more
innovations
 can lead to a lot of environmental issues which are hard to handle for any of the countries if something natural disasters occurred while
innovations
. In ,conclusion it can be observed that
innovations
 benefits outweigh its problems so modernization
are
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part of everyday
life
 that make lives secure and comfortable.
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