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Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they could get a good job once they are released. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Research has repeatedly proven that
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 majority of
criminals
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 have a low level of
education
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. As a consequence, many
people
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 argue that the effective method of reducing
crime
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 is to educate
people
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 in
prison
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 so that they obtain a job once they are released. I believe that educating oneself in a
prison
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 could help in changing the criminal mindset and can
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 help
criminals
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 utilise the
time
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 of imprisonment in a productive way.
Education
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 is the key to success is a well-known fact.
People
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 can achieve a great level of success with the help of
education
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. Which
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 could be a strong asset to tackle the worldwide problem
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 as increasing
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 rate, poverty etc.
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,
education
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 plays a vital role in shaping
people
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’s mindsets. It is believed that
people
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 often choose the path of committing the
crime
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 due to poverty and lack of
education
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.
Criminals
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 could use
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 opportunity to learn social skills or to pursue fields of personal interest.
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, they would gain enough knowledge or skills to cope up with society or maybe to get a placement once they are out of
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.
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, by utilising
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time
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 to educating themselves,
criminals
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 can not only expand their knowledge; can
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 pass their
time
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 in a much productive way.
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 can avail them to discover personal hobbies or skills while learning. Physiologists have proven that our immediate surroundings play an important role in moulding one’s personality and mindset. By keeping themselves swapped in learning, and due to educational environment in prions,
criminals
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 will less likely to go back to the transgression. One example of
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 is, a well-known sportsman named Billy John, who was in
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 for 6 years for his misdeeds. He utilised that
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 to pursue Mechanical Engineering by reading books and attaining online examinations,
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 he is working for a renounced company in England. To conclude, I strongly agree that, the idea of educating
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 in
prison
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 can definitely result in positive outcomes
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 as help
criminals
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 to change their mindset in a positive manner as well as possibly getting a job after the completion of the offence. Which ultimately will help to achieve the ultimate goal; diminishing the
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 rate in
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society.
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