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Rich countries are getting richer, while poor countries are getting poorer.

For many years,
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 big gap has been witnessed between wealthy
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 and underprivileged
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 which is primarily due to a couple of reasons. Because of better governance and lesser corruption in the
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-world
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, they are achieving higher growth when compared to the
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-world
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.
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, poor
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 can catch up
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 counterparts by enforcing stringent laws and committing to reforms.
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 with, rich
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 have
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 focus on zero-tolerance policies towards corruption and they have
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state-of-the-art technologies and machines which provide them faster workflow. Nowadays, modern technologies are
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 and soul of developed
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 with regard to their economic status.
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, Qatar is one of the richest
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 in the world in terms of GDP per capita which amounts to $150,000 per annum. The employment rate is almost 100% and the income levels are growing rapidly every year.
Wealthy
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 country should support their less fortunate counterparts by helping them in building schools for local citizens and
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 share their knowledge about technology and innovation. By doing so, all counties can be
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more educated and peaceful.
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, our world has
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 too which are underdeveloped and one of the prime reasons for
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 is that they do not have enough schools and robust education policies for their countrymen.
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, in Africa, the literacy rate is low because they do not have all kinds of conditions.
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, their economic status is suffering. In my
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 they should take all capabilities from other
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 and grow up. To conclude, rich nations are getting richer, because of their technological capabilities and great leaders.
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, if wealthy nations were to support poor
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, less fortunate nations would still develop and pace other counties eventually.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial assistance
  • technological assistance
  • economic gap
  • basic needs
  • healthcare
  • education
  • infrastructure
  • global stability
  • diplomatic relations
  • global cooperation
  • dependency
  • self-sufficiency
  • strings attached
  • political decisions
  • economic decisions
  • sovereignty
  • tension
  • mismanagement
  • corruption
  • intended purpose
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