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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 we are going to talk about if it is better to accept a bad
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 to try and improve
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 it is better to try to improve the
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 the world would
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, you are not going to continue growing in your life or as a person. I know that sometimes it is difficult to find a solution, but I will tell you a phrase that I hear when I was a child “the only thing that
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death”, maybe you should already hear it, but I consider that at the same time you grow, you give or understand what it
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 to tell us. In conclusion from my
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 it is going to be fine, and if it is not fine it is not the end.
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