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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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What is
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? The
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 word that comes to our mind when we think about
internet
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 in convenience. Every single thing is on the
internet
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. We can sit at
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 place and order food, books, air ticket, groceries, taxi, etc, whenever we need it. Lets look at some of the advantages of using the
internet
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: 1. It saves alot of time as we do not have to personally
travel
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 to buy anything. 2. We can easily review
things
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 and buy them upon the rating shared by other buyers. 3. We can have anything to eat for ourselves without stressing the need to go out, which is very helpful especially in the current scenario of Covid-19. 4. If we want to
travel
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 urgently, we can book our flight or train tickets ourself and
travel
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. We can
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 find cheap deals that will help us to lower the cost of
travel
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. Lets look at some of the disadvantages of using the
internet
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: 1. It obviously saves time but at the cost of loosing human touch and relations. It creates a wall between people, as everything is available online. It
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 makes a person lazy. 2. We can read how much ever reviews but to buy clothes after trying it has its own advantages. We can feel the fitting, cloth quality and pick the right fit rather than ordering it,
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 returning it back and forth. 3. We can order food for ourselves but having food in restaurant and enjoying the ambience is an completely different experince all together. 4. We can avail cheap deals but sometimes it may lead to fraudulent transactions and we can even loose our money. My own experience:
Internet
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 is the best thing ever to happen with the human kind, only if we knew how to
use
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 it right.
Internet
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 has made every single thing easier but I am very skeptical from buying
things
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 online. If I want to order something, it will always be from a reputed website. In my opinion,
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 should
use
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 the
internet
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 but he should
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 understand to balance it out. In my experince, it is always better to go out and shop for ourselves only if
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 has some time to spare. Once I ordered some cushions for my car and I thought I was ordering from a reputed website, but I was cheated and I never got my money back.
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 could have been different in the same scenario, if I had stopped procastinating and visited a shop to buy the cushions myself.
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, to
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 or not to
use
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 the
internet
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 is completely a personal choice, but I would definately prefer to buys
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 by personally visiting the stores
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 of using online portals.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • product selection
  • geographic limitations
  • price comparisons
  • physical inspection
  • customer satisfaction
  • delivery delay
  • online fraud
  • scams
  • trusted websites
  • notable disadvantages
  • increasingly popular
  • beneficial method
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