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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does the shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems?

#lack #water #importance #shortage #measures
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Freshwater is the
water
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 that contains low concentrations of dissolved salt and other total solids, which is 3% of the
earth
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's
water
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 and
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 1.2% is locked up in the glaciers, ice caps and
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 buried deep underground. The significance of
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water
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 is uncountable and can never be listed out; making us realize that
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water
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 is indispensable.
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, we utilize fresh
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 for drinking, cooking food, washing, crop growing, farming, food processing, gardening and so on.
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 it is a key to
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economic development if we carefully study
the
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 importance
of
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it
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. The shortage of
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freshwater
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water
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 is caused by many reasons, mainly due to growth in population
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 industrialization, global warming and humans' carelessness. The scarcity of
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water
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 has been tremendously affecting the lives of
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 the population in developing countries due to
lack
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 of technology and services.
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 has been a hazard to the regions where the
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 resources have been lesser than the rest of the world. In
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 places, women even the children have to walk for miles to carry a pot of drinking
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,
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 children mostly miss their education
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 in order to survive their lives.
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, if the rain does not come in time, crops and animals die, leading to
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 disasters
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 as starvation and malnutrition.
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,
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 badly affects the wildlife resulting
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 more
some
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delicate species may extinct. One of the other issues is that, spreading of
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diseases
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 as diarriayah and cholera making worse the lives of those suffering without sufficient
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. In fact, unavailability or shortage of
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water
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 leads directly and indirectly to hundreds of issues that decide the existence of living beings on
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. Since the
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's
fresh
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water
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 resource is getting smaller and we are leading towards a dry era, prompt as well as sustainable actions must be taken to mitigate the potential risk coming on our way. Describing
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the long terms plans to tackle the impact, crop growing and plantation consumes a large volume of
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water
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 but it is not necessarily the purified
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.
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, treated
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 from a
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water
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 treatment process
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 can be used.
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 method is already in operation in many countries and has been a very effective sustainable way of preserving the
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water
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 resource.
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 process kills the harmful germs in treated
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,
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 drinkable. Though people are now reluctant to use it, the technology should be
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 developed as it will certainly come in handy in future. Coming to
the short terms plans
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,
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water
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the water
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 bill of municipal
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 supply can be increased so that people tend to be careful not to waste
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 even though they have no idea of how scares the
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 is.
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 television advertisements and awareness programmes should be introduced for the general public to understand the value of
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water
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. In conclusion, even though our
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 is covered with
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, the
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water
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 or potable
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 volume is like a tiny barge in the Atlantic Ocean. There is no life if there is no
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.
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, future consequences must be realized and precautions must be taken to preserve
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 invaluable
life giving
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 drink
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 before it is too late.
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