Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame.  Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some journalists follow famous artists and interfere
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personal life by snapping them at every spot. Some people are in
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of
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thing whereas, others are on
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side. In
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essay, I will shed some light on both points.
To begin
with, Privacy is a crucial part of everyone's life.
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their personal space
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whether
they are famous or not. Some press reporters stoke celebrities to make their articles
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. Some people think it is a bad thing because it can mentally affect their lives. To explain it, famous personalities have hectic schedules and
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busier life than common individuals. They need some relaxation from their work and media. when they go out on holidays with loved ones some reporters take pictures and made false stories to get more publicity which can make mental stress on the other person.
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, Indian famous actor Shushant Singh did suicide after got captured
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random
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girl and wrongly presented in front
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people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invasion of privacy
  • personal space
  • media scrutiny
  • mental health
  • public figures
  • relentless pursuit
  • legal implications
  • ethical considerations
  • tabloid journalism
  • financial gain
  • public interest
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