Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security while others believe that they can not always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and given your own opinion.

Some people claim that
job
satisfaction is of importance whilst
the
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opponents prefer career security.
This
essay will expand both views;
however
, from my perspective, I partly agree with the
second
sentiment. On the one hand,
job
security brings about a fixed income, which will usually stay steady and helps
staffs
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get through hard periods of life
such
as getting in a poor health condition or buying houses and cars. Without a stable occupation, the risk of being unemployed will significantly increase and following
this
are a wide range of difficulties.
For example
, when the CORONA virus
first
broke out in 2019, various people have lost their
job
, had neither heart nor home or even committed suicide, which becomes common in Japan at that time.
On the other hand
, occupations
which
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are suitable for employees’ talent and liking will obviously create high productivity in work as they have passion and motive.
Moreover
, it will be easier to be creative in work when they truly adore what they are doing and it can be denied that working with passion
also
brings about high income. Particularly artists, who can only create stunning compositions only when they put their mind into art and obviously, various artworks are expensive and valuable.
Besides
,
job
satisfaction
also
makes people feel fulfilled and brings them endless happiness, which is vital
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of life as the pressure of the economy is always heavy with every individual.
This
not only creates a long-term bond between employees and their occupations but
also
stabilizes the human resources and management. All things balanced, it is my firm conviction that
although
job
security plays a vital role in people’s lives, passion and likings should
also
be considered as one of the important conditions when applying for occupations.

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