Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activities for young adults in many countries. Why is this? It is a positive or negative development?

Shopping is becoming increasingly popular in many countries. The younger generation
spend
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spends

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their
time
for
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shopping, and it is considered
as
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the most popular
forms
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form

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of leisure
activities
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activity

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. The reason is people spend their valuable
time
with
friends
and family members. It is a positive development and it improves
the
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their

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lifestyle
of
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apply

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them
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. Shopping makes young adults
to
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apply

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spend
their
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a

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good
time
with their blood relatives and
friends
.
In addition
, the adults love to go to
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a restaurant
the restaurant

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restaurant
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restaurants

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and enjoy foods that they like.
Furthermore
, some groups plan to go to
movies
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the movies

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to have a great
time
with their loved ones.
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, in many countries, shopping malls have various facilities including food
court
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courts

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and theatres that attract the young population to spend most of their leisure
time
.
As a result
, they get
a
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greater happiness and fulfilment in their life. There are many positive developments while shopping.
Firstly
, in the current fast-paced world, youngsters get stress-free life though they have many commitments.
Secondly
, while going with families, the bonding among them increases drastically.
Finally
, going with
friends
and have fun with them improves jovialness.
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,
although
the youth population face
hectic
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a hectic

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work schedule, the work-life balance is maintained comfortably.
Therefore
, the above points lead to lifestyle improvements. In conclusion, shopping with
friends
and families increase the bonding among them and increases
the
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happiness. It
also
promotes many positive developments and leads to a greater lifestyle. It is an individual responsibility to make sure that the
time
spent outside is memorable and enjoyable.
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