As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it's no longer mere science fiction.

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In general, most

people

tend to view things differently about cloning

human

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for acquiring human spare parts. Some

people

believe that it cannot be real because it is illegal and immoral to clone

human

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. But, I partially agree that the story of cloning could be

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true in some underground labs where several doctors are operating with cloning

human

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. For

this

case, I suppose that spare parts from cloning can help

lot

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people

to live longer.

First

of all,

the

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spare

organs

are essential for

human

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nowadays because these can help many

people

to stay longer with their

family

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than

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they

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could be.

For instance

people

who had an accident would not be able to survive if some vital

organs

heart

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the heart

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and

lung

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were damaged.

Therefore

, the implanted

organs

from the labs or hospitals could be utilized and replaced

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damaged

organs

This

can considerably save a lot of

people

life.

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, cloning

human

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is still considered by

majority

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people

to be unethical

ways

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to receive spare

organs

as well. In the cloning experiment, most of

subjects

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that are cloned still have their own life as normal

people

. But, if we want to take their vital

organs

, the subjects will have to be killed

first

This

reason can make

people

think that

the

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cloning can be the most horrible story for them. In conclusion, it is hard to make several

people

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view things in the same way in

case

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of cloning

human

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humans

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for getting spare

organs

. In my view, I still assert that cloning is the authentic story in some places. I would think that in the future we will have sophisticated technology which can replace cloning.

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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it's no longer mere science fiction.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society?

At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some shops are open 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for the customer, shop staff and company as a whole?

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?