Some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does this happen? And what are the main factors to get a successful life?

It is said that study is the only and the fastest way that leads to success.
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, I just agree with a part of it because there are lots of people who failed at school but they are still highly successful in their adult life.There are several reasons that
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are still using the old-fashioned methods of teaching that only focus on the grades of the students and
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, they evaluate students by their scores, not by their effort or other talents that
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not relate to the study. Even the parents want their children to have
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high grades at school more than developing their social skills. And like I said, they are judged as bad if their grades are not high no matter how talented they are
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other fields.
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make people think they are losers and can not do anything, but when they grow up, some of them are really successful because they developed their talent and used it to help them, they practice a lot rather than just learning theory in the books.
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, success including not only knowledge but
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skills and hard
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. And the most important thing is experience, the fact that they entered the society earlier helped them to become more independent and have more valuable experiences in social life. In conclusion, just because someone failed at school doesn’t mean they can’t be successful in life. The secret of being successful is putting
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lot of effort and perseverance.
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is just one path in many other roads to become a successful people, an academic qualification just improve a person’s chances of achieving success, not a certificate

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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