Some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does this happen? And what are the main factors to get a successful life?

Some people succeed in
life
despite
they
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fail
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in
school
.In the
further
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I am going to write about the reasons for
this
and
also
about the most important feature a person should possess to succeed in
life
.   We see many incidents where people fail in their schools, but become successful in
life
.The reasons for
this
are
firstly
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because, children might be interested in some other fields like sports, business, music and other kinds of arts, rather than studies. So eventually in the
future
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they succeed in the profession of their interest and
passion
.
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, consider Sachin Tendulkar, the most successful player in the history of cricket,
had
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failed in
10th
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the 10th

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standard.
Second
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The second
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reason for
school
flunked children becoming successful in
life
is
,
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their appetite for being creative and developing leadership skills, whereas in
school
a child got to be obedient and follow the instructions of teachers, which can hamper
kid's
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creativity and leadership skills.  According to
me
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my

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, the most vital feature required in a person to succeed in
life
is to possess
passion
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a passion

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for a
perticular
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particular

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feild
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field

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, which motivates a person to dedicate himself to his profession , it ignites
strong
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desire to excel in the profession and
also
in his
life
.
For example
, consider Akshay Kumar, who is
very
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a very

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successful and popular actor in
Indian
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the Indian

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film industry, who
also
happened to be
failure
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a failure

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in his
school
.It was all his
passion
for acting that brought him so far. In conclusion, some people succeed in
life
even though they fail in
school
because of their interest and
passion
for other
feild
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field

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and
also
because of their hunger to be creative and develop leadership skills. Being passionate about a
feild
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field

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is the most important asset to succeed in
life
.

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