People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people can eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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variety of exotic
food
in our lives
as a result
of globalisation.
Moreover
, it is common for people in some
countires
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to have a higher proportion of foreign meals than domestic ones.From my perspective,
although
some people can benefit from
this
scenario, the disadvantages are dominant. There is no denying that surging demand for foreign cuisine raises
revenue
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of international companies involved in the
food
industry.
Furthermore
, with
additonal
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additional

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income, it may encourage
food
producers to set up factories or promote
establishment
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of new restaurants in other countries, which may raise employment in the host country.
However
, it is
also
true that some
food
symbolise
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more dominant cultures compared to domestic ones.So they are regarded as more valuable and have greater general acceptability , resulting in people paying less attention to local cuisine. With reduced popularity,
revenue
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of local
food
sellers who focus on
traditional
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cuisine of the home countries may plunge and be driven out of the business eventually.
Therefore
, it
deterioates
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deteriorates

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the preservation of local culture as
food
is a significant part of national identity.
In addition
, some of the ingredients of foreign
food
may need to be imported over long distances owing to the strict restriction on the
porduction
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production

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process
such
as location and weather, which reduces the freshness and quality of the final product.
Besides
, in
such
cases, the whole
transportion
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transportation

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process may not be under full supervision due to the length of the route.So there are high chances that those ingredients carry
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hazardous pathogens and spread epidemic diseases, especially for the time being. To sum up,
although
this
trend may bring economic growth or raise employment, it can work out to be the exact opposite for
domestic
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food
industry and spread diseases.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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