Some people think that children should start school sooner while others believe that they should not start it before the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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to commence academy early can be viewed in different ways, due to believing, norms and values. In recent times the rise in starting
school
earlier has increased due to
modernized
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nature of life. From the
view point
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of starting institute earlier in
children
, it is best because with the recent development in technology in the world most
children
born in
this
technology age has more experience in terms of their doings.
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is much increased developmental mental stability in
children
who has the opportunity to start
school
quickly. The learning process is longer than
the
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olden days. Most schools in
this
era
has
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the capacity to stand any
child
's disabilities. It is very clear that a
child
who begins education very fast has a greater influence
in
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on

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both the parents and the
children
.
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in a case of a
working class
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mother that needs to start working back after the maternal leave and
their
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is no help, most of them
prefers
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to put the baby in
day care
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,
this
would save enough stress and
this
would make the
child
to
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apply

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adapt very fast. On the opposite side of
view
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if
a
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infant without parents that don't think
on
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about

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the benefit of starting
school
early feels it
a
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waste of money doing that, they
prefers
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the
child
gets to a standard age before commencing
school
. There is
also
a
believe
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that most
children
how goes to
school
too early
has
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have

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no chance of learning anything. In conclusion, the merit of
adolescent
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adolescents

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stating
school
early awaits the demerit with better planning and proper understanding of the needs of early educational background.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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