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Some people think that children should start school sooner while others believe that they should not start it before the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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The belief of
minor
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 to commence academy early can be viewed in different ways, due to believing, norms and values. In recent times the rise in starting
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 earlier has increased due to
modernized
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 nature of life. From the
view point
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 of starting institute earlier in
children
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, it is best because with the recent development in technology in the world most
children
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 born in
this
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 technology age has more experience in terms of their doings.
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 is much increased developmental mental stability in
children
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 who has the opportunity to start
school
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 quickly. The learning process is longer than
the
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 olden days. Most schools in
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 era
has
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 the capacity to stand any
child
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's disabilities. It is very clear that a
child
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 who begins education very fast has a greater influence
in
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 both the parents and the
children
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.
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 in a case of a
working class
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 mother that needs to start working back after the maternal leave and
their
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 is no help, most of them
prefers
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 to put the baby in
day care
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,
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 would save enough stress and
this
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 would make the
child
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to
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adapt very fast. On the opposite side of
view
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 if
a
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 infant without parents that don't think
on
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about
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 the benefit of starting
school
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 early feels it
a
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waste of money doing that, they
prefers
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 the
child
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 gets to a standard age before commencing
school
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. There is
also
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 a
believe
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 that most
children
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 how goes to
school
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 too early
has
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 no chance of learning anything. In conclusion, the merit of
adolescent
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 stating
school
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 early awaits the demerit with better planning and proper understanding of the needs of early educational background.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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