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More and more companies are allowing employees to work from home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#companies #employees #work #home #development
In view of the recent development in the pandemic rise, most companies preferred that their workers perform their duties from
home
. Working from
home
 has a greater disadvantage to the advantage.
For
example
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 if an
employees
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 works from
home
 they have the highest chances of not performing their duties properly because of so
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many
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may
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many
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 distractions either from the
nebourhood
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neighbourhood
gaybourhood
 and
other thing
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another thing
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 like noise, lack of light
ect
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at
this
 may
cause
 a lot by not concentrating fully. In another
view
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 the disadvantage of working
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home
 can
cause
 lots of job
oppurtnites
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opportunities
. Materials and tools to
work
 with might be scars and could lead to low productivity. Another disadvantage of performing duties at
home
 can lead to laziness and increased cost and low income which could
cause
 the input and output not to have a stable balance. It is
dismerit
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demerit
 because
their
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 won't be a
team
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teamwork
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work
 and
cause
 reduced productivity in the business. For that of the merit, it gives you more time to attend to personal
work
 at
home
 and make you
work
 at your convince with pressure and supervision. In conclusion, working from
home
 has more negative effects than
the
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positive. Tasks done at the
work place
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workplace
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 would .working is essential, but positively with good
team
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teamwork
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work
, materials and manpower it is most important to
work
 at the office.
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