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Some people think parents should control the behaviour of children from a very young age but others think we should give them more freedom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #control #behaviour #children #age #freedom
The
behaviors
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 of
children
 can not be
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the emphasis
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emphasis
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. Parents are the
first
 contact point to
children
,
therefore
 the
behaviors
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behaviours
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 of
children
 should take place
in
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at
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 a younger
age
. It is of no doubt that the training of
children
 begins from
home
,
therefore
 each
attributes
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attribute
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 of a
child
 shown must be put into consideration and realized in time for proper training.
Firstly
, it is very important that the guidance of
younger
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a younger
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 infant at an early stage would put the
child
 at lesser risk of hazards and created good
behavior
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behaviour
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 as the infant begins to grow into
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an adolescent
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adolescent
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adolescence
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.
Secondly
,
with
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apply
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proper control
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of
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in habits
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inhabits
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 at
early
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an early
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age
,
thus
 help in the mental
develop
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development
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 of the young
child
,
therefore
 impacting more and effective knowledge to them.
Likewise
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 with proper
home
 training from
parents
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,parents
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children
 learn faster and can differentiate the good from the bad attitudes.
Thirdly
, with adequate
home
 training from their guidance, there will be respect and presentation outside the
home
 will be appropriate with
a good knowledge
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good knowledge
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 and understanding.
Furthermore
, it is worthy to note that freedom from parents in growing up is not totally out of place because
this
 would great
a bound
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abound
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 between the guidance and the
children
, in spite of
this
 the younger
age
 would be free to express their
self-defense
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self-defence
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.
Moreover
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 excess freedom given at
early
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an early
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 stage of
age
 possess the
child
 to unwanted
behaviors
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behaviours
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 and as well cause so much damage as the
child
 grows into adolescent
age
. In conclusion, you will agree with me that
behavior
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behaviour
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 is
an
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a
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 habit that can not be hidden,
therefore
 there should be an extent of freedom that should be given to the younger
age
 group for proper
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upbringing
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up bringing
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upbringing
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.
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