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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
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this
 modern
era
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internet
 has replaced many traditional activities. While some people believe that development in technology will
loose
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 consumers
intrest
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interest
interested
 in investing their money in buying
newspaper
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a newspaper
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 in future. Others disagree
on
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this
 argument.
This
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this
 discussion. In
last
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 few decades, there has been tremendous advancement in technology and it has resulted
into
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 many positive effects on society.
To begin
 with,
internet
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the internet
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 has made everything easily accessible nowadays
in contrast
 to earlier times. In
90s
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the 90s
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 students used to spend their
valueable
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valuable
time
on
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finding correct
books
 in order to complete their projects and spend
considerable
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 amount on printing or getting xerox from available
books
.
On the other hand
, nowadays most of the
contents
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content
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 is available online and students can access it at any
time
 and any location.
Furthermore
, reading
news
 online has become quite popular in
current
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 generation and it can be predicted that it will take over traditional
newspaper
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newspapers
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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time
. Advancement in technology provides ample
of
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variety in
news
 content.
For example
, in earlier times, a
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newspaper
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news paper
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newspaper
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 was published in only one language and it used to have
limited
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a limited
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 amount of information. Whereas, in current
time
, people get
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to choose their language and
catagory
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category
 of
news
 they would like to read without paying anything extra than
internet
 charges which makes it more convenient. In conclusion, I agree that in upcoming
time
,
demand
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of
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 traditional
books
 and paper will decrease
however
 it is debatable fact that no one would purchase those since there are some people who still believe in reading
books
 and would like to disconnect themselves from
internet
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the internet
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 for a while.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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