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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

#countries #graduates #employment #factors #situation
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Nowadays, there are a lot of high
education
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 graduates that they don'
t
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 have a
job
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 in many countries. In
this
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 essay, I will explore the young
people
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's problems associated with unemployment and suggests possible solutions for them.
Firstly
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, I will share an issue related to a major issue and give an available solution, and
secondly
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, I will discuss another related problem and suggest a possible solution. In the end, I will express my own opinion on the matter.
To begin
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 with,
education
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 is indeed important for find a good
job
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, but nowadays it is not enough. Many factors like bad economic
situation
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, poverty of
country
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 and discrepancy in salary may have caused
this
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situation
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. In many countries, young
people
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, who finished their
education
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, want to start
work
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 in their field of study, but it is not easy as it looks.
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, as a
person
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, I finished my master's degree, but I couldn'
t
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 find a
job
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 in my
country
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 because in my
country
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 a
person
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 can find a
job
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 who have. That's why I decided to migrate to another
country
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 to find a
job
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 with my ability.
On the other hand
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, the bad economic
situation
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 of one
country
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 can be the main issue for couldn'
t
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 find a
job
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. In a
country
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, which has a low economy, poverty is high, and where poverty is high, that means the jobs are low.
Moreover
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, if a young
person
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 can'
t
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 find a
job
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,
therefore
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, can'
t
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 buy a house or even rent a place to live, and
also
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 can'
t
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 have a friend and in
this
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situation
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, their mental health can damage.
For instance
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, in a not wealthy
country
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, there are not many factories or places for
work
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, and
people
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 who finished their
education
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 have to
work
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 in a low-quality
job
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, inconsequently
person
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 loses their self-confidence. In conclusion, each
country
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's government should find a possible resolution for
this
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 major problem like build a more factory or choose a
person
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 with the ability to
work
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.
Furthermore
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, in my opinion, young
people
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 have to improve themselves, and change their place of life and move somewhere they can find a better
job
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.
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